People often create different versions of the Lord's Prayer, as Aubrey said. Even pastors of churches. Lots of preachers tell the story of the child who's not sure whether she's praying to Richard or Harold, because she thinks the words are 'Our Father Richard in heaven, Harold be thy name'. That one kind of makes a point about the language not being very child-friendly!
There was also a competition on one site to make a text version of the Lord's Prayer, in 160 characters or less - you can see the winners here
. Many Christians enjoyed this, but there's bound to be some who were offended (after all, some people are offended by text language in general, regardless of what it says!)
But that's the thing - there are always people who will be offended at anything. A lot of people like to nurture the state of 'being offended' because it makes them feel important and special, and it causes people to tiptoe around them. If you try to cater to everyone's sensibilities, you'd never post anything on FB (or anywhere!)! At the same time, if they just mentioned that they personally don't like it, and explained why (as opposed to calling you an evil blasphemer and demanding that you take it down!) that's fair enough - they don't have to like it. They can hide it from their FB feed. There are people on FB whom I hide because I find the stuff they post obnoxious/annoying/offensive - but I recognise it's their prerogative to post what they want, and they don't require my approval to post stuff.
As for what I think of the hockey prayer, I just think it's silly. It doesn't offend me or make me laugh. I'm not into hockey, so I don't get the references, and I've seen so many of such prayers, so I just think 'Oh, another one of those'. ;D And being a bit pedantic, I observe it doesn't strictly follow the Lord's Prayer, because the last part, based on 'In the name of the Father, the Son and the Holy Spirit' isn't actually the way the Lord's prayer ends. It is how people are baptised, which is something completely different. It should be 'For thine is the kingdom, the power and the glory, for ever and ever'.